エッセイ クロス校正 yori-money

私はLbow君のOlfacticsを校正しました。再度読み直すことで復習になりました。（yori-money）

　I summarized one of the categories of nonverbal communication, which I chose is Olfactics. Olfactics is the study of smell. It relates to human communication. Our body associates certain smells with different feelings and emotions. Smells also trigger our memory. Smells remain in our memory much longer than things we see or hear. People have a lot of (much of a) senses of smell

　A sense of smell is different between cultures. Take people in the United States, for instance. They are taught by advertisers and medical people to wash off natural odors and replace them with neutral, fragrance-free or substitute smells, such as an 8×4, produced by Kao. On the other hand, people in India or Arab(aic didn’t) do not care about their smells.

Olfactics (have) has five tools as nonverbal communication, such as smell blindness, smell adaptation, smell memory, smell overload, and smell discrimination. Smell blindness is a physiological blockage. (And) People who are smell-blindness have taste-identification difficulties. Smell adaptation is a condition that people gradually lose the distinctiveness of a particular smell through repeated contact with it. Smell memory is one of the abilities to recall previous situations. Smell overload is a situation when you are overpowered by large number of odors or one extremely strong odor. (full with the many kinds of smells.) Lastly smell discrimination is one of the abilities, which is that people can distinguish a particular smell. This is (There are) a summary of Olfactics.
Opinion
　I would like to discuss (which) why Olfactics tools as nonverbal communication is important in our life. The Most important tool for a comfortable life, especially diets, is smell discrimination, not smell blindness because of the enjoyment (ing) our foods. Take people caught a cold and have a runny nose, for example. They are not able to know smells of foods, and thus (then) they are also unable to know tastes of foods and they can’t enjoy having their foods. We eat (have) foods more than three times every day. That’s why smell discrimination is necessary for people to enjoy every diet.
　In other cases, smell discrimination is needed to protect our lives. When fire occurs and there is (full of) smoked, we can easily realize the smoke without seeing. And we can escape from a fire and protect our lives. That’s why smell discrimination is the most important Olfactics tool (of) as nonverbal communication.
・careは自動詞なのでaboutがつく。
・smell discriminationは必要としているのではなく，私たちの生活に必要とされている。
・escapeは自動詞なのでfromが必要。
・thenでは時間や順番，命令の結果を述べる場合に使用するので，この場合は前の文から予想される結果を述べているので，thusやthereforeを使用した方が良いと思います。